Have you heard of Haiku?
12-06-2017, 01:36 PM,
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Hello Bring4thers!

There is a short form of poetry created by the Japanese, called Haiku. A traditional form of it goes as so:

Old Pond
A frog jumps in
-the sound of water

By Matsuo Basho


They take the reader to one moment in their imagination.
In 3 lines or less, they relay an occurrence or relation between entities: animals, weather, season, place, items, structure, etc. very simply.

I invite anyone to post haikus they have written and / or ones they like.


Here are some that I enjoy:

A fallen flower
returning to the branch?
   It was a butterfly

          The snow of yesterday
             that fell like cherry blossoms
           is water once again

no escaping it
I must step on fallen leaves
  to take this path



Here are some I've written:


Trickling from dark soil,
a creek emerges
beneath silent Oaks


           Cold silent night.
            Where are they?
                A leaf drops


The darkest tempest
 overseen by a billion stars
-the sight of lightning


              Brisk morning by foot
                empty handed samurai
                 longs for nothing more

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12-07-2017, 01:20 PM,
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RE: Have you heard of Haiku?
Writing english haiku
sasugani
muri...

better in japanese...
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12-07-2017, 09:54 PM,
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RE: Have you heard of Haiku?
(12-07-2017, 01:20 PM)unity100 Wrote:  Writing english haiku
sasugani
muri...

better in japanese...


Google translates that to

Indeed
impossible...

What more does that mean to you?

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12-08-2017, 02:04 AM, (This post was last modified: 12-10-2017, 12:42 AM by Dekalb_Blues.)
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CRANKY BUT GENKI
(A poem to be read round-eyedly, or even shifty-eyedly)

What a silly art:
Just syllabic'ly-driven
  poemlets?! No way, man!

Besides, what the hell -- 
No two lines that even rhyme?!
That don't sound sublime.

We true arteests (if
   so constrained) must seek the truth
In low-couth haikuth.

---- Kashikoi Baka [The arteest formerly known as Dekalb_Blues], from his
Sanpaku School of Poetic Wordjamming for Gaijin Dummies (Tokyo & Hoboken: Un-aware Aisumasen Press, 2017)


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Bonus Japanese word for today:

Arigata-meiwaku  -- An act someone does for you that you didn't want to have them do and tried to avoid having
them do, but they went ahead anyway, determined to do you a favor, and then things went wrong and caused you
a lot of trouble, yet nevertheless in the end social conventions required you to express gratitude

. . . which somehow links to this interesting German word:

Backpfeifengesicht -- A face badly in need of a fist

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https://calisphere.org/item/ark:/20775/bb12977599

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https://thetab.com/us/princeton/2016/03/05/the-stereotypes-about-living-in-japan-that-are-actually-true-and-a-few-that-arent-2839

For a good time, see also:
https://www.bring4th.org/forums/showthread.php?tid=3976&pid=235107#pid235107
https://www.bring4th.org/forums/showthread.php?tid=8236&pid=224686&pid=224686#pid224686
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12-08-2017, 06:00 AM,
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RE: Have you heard of Haiku?
(12-07-2017, 09:54 PM)I am Shayne Wrote:  
(12-07-2017, 01:20 PM)unity100 Wrote:  Writing english haiku
sasugani
muri...

better in japanese...


Google translates that to

Indeed
impossible...

What more does that mean to you?

omae no misketa no henji wa omae no kokoro no naka de iru!!!
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12-08-2017, 06:11 AM,
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RE: Have you heard of Haiku?
This makes me want to learn languages.

I want to learn so much.

Didn't a haiku need to be a specific amount of syllables?  Or...Am I thinking of something else?
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12-08-2017, 06:40 AM,
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RE: Have you heard of Haiku?
(12-08-2017, 06:11 AM)Coordinate_Apotheosis Wrote:  This makes me want to learn languages.

I want to learn so much.

Didn't a haiku need to be a specific amount of syllables?  Or...Am I thinking of something else?

My last sentence wasnt a haiku. I made up the earlier one too.
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12-08-2017, 11:15 PM,
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RE: Have you heard of Haiku?
(12-08-2017, 06:11 AM)Coordinate_Apotheosis Wrote:  This makes me want to learn languages.

I want to learn so much.

Didn't a haiku need to be a specific amount of syllables?  Or...Am I thinking of something else?

Yeah, that's what I thought too. At least at school I was taught to either write a haiku using 17 syllables in a 5-7-5 pattern or 11 syllables in 3-5-3 pattern. 

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12-09-2017, 12:12 PM,
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RE: Have you heard of Haiku?
5-7-5 is the standard way of writing it, but its okay if its less syllables. Sometimes 17 syllables makes the haiku unnecessarily drawn out.

As long as it is the simplicity of the relationship of 2 entities. Generally a cutting phrase is added, which gives the reader a sense of action or unexpectedness about that moment.

Frozen pond
An Oak leaf
half in
half out


This haiku does not follow the 5-7-5 (in english), nor the 3 line format, but it does what haikus are awesome for: It conveys (to me) a feeling and an imaginative picture. The entities are a frozen pond and an Oak leaf. Their relationship is that the fallen oak leaf 'half in, half out' atop the frozen pond.


moonlit snail trails
on the garden Buddha

Also doesnt adhere to the characteristics of general haiku, but it still conveys a picture and a feeling within one moment

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12-09-2017, 05:02 PM,
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RE: Have you heard of Haiku?
Refreshing cold Air,
how I can and do love you.
You make warmth better.

No shoes required
so of course my feet are bare.
The ground is holy.

The heavenly Fog
forces me to feel surreal
and I am thankful.

Leaves are dancing down,
green and yellow turn to brown.
Death begins again.

Wondrous Water,
I see you, feel you, am you...
Could I be more blessed?

Pain has a purpose,
along with everything else.
In time you will see.

"I am all that has been, and is, and shall be..."
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12-10-2017, 12:37 AM, (This post was last modified: 01-03-2018, 04:42 PM by Dekalb_Blues.)
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Chikai ga nai hamaki

Great haiku concept!

I frame it concisely but -- !

  too many sylla-





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